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    MultipleMike
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    Which National song inspired this? “All the Wine” maybe? It’s nice, the lead is really catchy when it comes in. Again, I get a Guided by Voices vibe from it, mostly because the main riff sounds like “Don’t Stop Now”, which is not a bad thing at all.

    The only criticism I really have is that it sounds a lot like other ones you’ve recorded. For fun, try writing something that sounds unlike anything you’ve done before. It can be challenging, but highly rewarding too.

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    <div class=”d4p-bbp-quote-title”>MultipleMike wrote:</div>Which National song inspired this? “All the Wine” maybe? It’s nice, the lead is really catchy when it comes in. Again, I get a Guided by Voices vibe from it, mostly because the main riff sounds like “Don’t Stop Now”, which is not a bad thing at all.

    The only criticism I really have is that it sounds a lot like other ones you’ve recorded. For fun, try writing something that sounds unlike anything you’ve done before. It can be challenging, but highly rewarding too.

    Thanks for the feedback! I was hoping you would be the one to reply. That’s an issue I always find when writing songs; they sound too similar. Whether this uniformity between songs is good or bad is subjective. I like it when bands keep to a certain sound but that limits their musicianship, so branching out to new sounds is important I guess.

    You gave my Guided by Voices comparisons on some of my first pieces which is interesting considering I only know one of their songs and rarely listen to it!

    I am trying to go through all my tracks and see which ones would be good enough to include on an LP or at least an EP. I have written around 50 songs in total, I would say 60% are just riffs at the moment but are a good starting point. I wrote the following track as an album opener and was wondering if you thought it would make for a good album opener? Also, does it sound to similar to my other stuff.

    #15095

    MultipleMike
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    It probably would work as an opener, but I think it would be better as a track #2 following a brief minute or less long intro song. It does sound different from your other work, while maintaining your identity, which is good. I like this one a lot, by the way. I still think you should practice as a vocalist and add some verses.

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    <div class=”d4p-bbp-quote-title”>MultipleMike wrote:</div>It probably would work as an opener, but I think it would be better as a track #2 following a brief minute or less long intro song. It does sound different from your other work, while maintaining your identity, which is good. I like this one a lot, by the way. I still think you should practice as a vocalist and add some verses.

    Yeah, I am confident in my ability as a vocalist by not a lyricist. I did write a track recently heavily inspired by Interpol and the post-punk movement and have written some lyrics to add. At the moment here is the instrumental but when I find time I will add the vocals on top. Thanks again for listening! It’s nice to know what to work on and how to improve by getting feedback. I have also started using Reddit and found a subreddit called /r/WeAreTheMusicMakers which has weekly feedback threads.

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    Finally recorded some vocals, but with a shitty mic 😉

    Any feedback on lyrics would be appreciated too! I suck at lyrics for the most part tho…

    Lyrics:

    The question needs an answer

    will you ask her

    if she’ll survive?

    I slept in my car for four days

    I showered at home

    my heart was breaking

    and I couldn’t do nothing

    So fucking say something

    you pale bag of bones

    Just fucking say something

    or I’ll leave

    The question needs an answer

    Will you ask her

    if she’ll survive?

    You look like the rabbit I used to own

    bruised and battered to the bone

    but we didn’t eat you

    So fucking say something

    you pale bag of bones

    Just fucking say something

    or I’ll leave

    you on your deathbed

    #15176

    MultipleMike
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    Hey, sorry I missed this update. I must have had a secret meeting or something somewhere.

    I like the song. The vocals and lyrics are good although I wonder if the rabbit / battered to the bone couplet intended to sound as disturbing as it does. In any case, they’re very good and feel lived in. Musically I always tend to draw comparisons to other acts, and you’ve tapped into another sound I’m fond of with the quiet vocals drenched in reverb, which is The Appleseed Cast’s “Low level Owl 1 & 2”, a personal favourite of mine. Keep doing what you’re doing!

    #15451

    frankmalony
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    In every aspects there is always our weaker side, and when it comes to interest we have, we always have something hidden that needs to be cultivated and some improvisation. Maybe that aspects, is something that we should criticize our own and see how we can manage to get along with it and enhance..

    Regards.
    Frank|http://smartleesecreative.com/about-us/

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